Thursday, February 13, 2014

Need a Quick Opinion Please!


Help!! I've looked at this so long, my eyes have crossed, and I would be ever so grateful for your opinion. Which back cover copy do you prefer for my June release, Beauty and the Barbarian


#1

Never before has Merrin seen a corpse. Oddly, the sight of the Highlander face down on the beach does not repulse her. Hidden away on the remote islet of Eilean Fladda, she’s curious—she’s scarcely seen a man in his prime. Brushing the hair from his face, her fingers connect with warm flesh. Warm.

Quickly, Merrin pulls the scarf across her neck to conceal the hideous mark of the devil—an ugly red mottling that prevents her from ever living a normal life. Then she barrows the fevered man to the cottage whilst he raves unintelligibly.

Ian MacLeod wakes to a woman so radiant, he believes her an angel. But when the lass shrinks from him, the Highlander fears she’s learned of his reprehensible deeds. While he heals, Ian pulls away her scarf, exposing her witch’s mark. Though she’s mortified that her secret has been revealed, he doesn’t fear her. Ian has become spellbound by Merrin’s allure. He’d do anything to erase his haunting past and earn her trust.

Once Ian’s location is exposed, the couple is forced to flee Merrin’s sheltered world. Fighting for survival, Ian wins Merrin’s heart, until destiny brings forth a tumult that may forever ruin them both.



#2

Born with the mark of the devil, Merrin has been hidden on the Isle of Eilean Fladda for near twenty years. When the body of a Highlander washes ashore, the innocent lass presumes him dead. Brushing the hair from his face, she’s startled to discover the warrior’s scarcely alive. He’s in the throes of a fever that has him muttering unintelligibly about his evil past.

Ian MacLeod wakes to a woman so radiant, he believes her an angel. But when the lass shuns him, the Highlander fears she’s learned of the atrocities he has committed. While he heals, Ian uncovers her witch’s mark, yet he’s spellbound by Merrin’s allure. He’d do anything to erase his haunting past and earn her trust.


Once Ian’s location is exposed, the couple is forced to flee Merrin’s sheltered world. Fighting for survival, Ian wins Merrin’s heart—until destiny brings forth a tumult that may forever ruin them both. 


Please leave a comment with your preference. #1 or #2...THANK YOU SO MUCH!

25 comments:

  1. Number two! TMI in #1. You want to tantalize, not tell the entire story!

    Plus, it also depends on what cool cover art you have on the back. Would there be enough room for #1? Go with #2. :D

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  2. I like number 1, but get rid of 'Quickly' in he second paragraph :)

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    1. Will Do! Ack! Get rid of those adverbs!

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  3. I prefer #2, which given the comments so far really doesn't help, does it?

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    1. I'm keeping a tally. Lots of people are responding on FB, too!

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  4. Ha! Sounds like I still need to work it. My husband likes the detail. Honestly, I like #2 too, but thought it needed more of a hook...then the detail bubbled out.

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  5. I still like #2 better. It hits harder and I want to know more.

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  6. Definitely #2. #1 reads too much like an excerpt.

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  7. I like #1 more but too much details, maybe shorten it!

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  8. This is a hard one! I like the writing in #1 the best, but think #2 sounds more like a back cover. So no help here, sorry! =)

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  9. I like the brevity and the lure of #2. Both #1 and #2 omits the commitment or reason why Merrin is fleeing with Ian. Trying to write a synopsis without revealing the entire story is a very hard task.

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